17A – Elevator Pitch No. 2
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wNVTeELe4sI&t=7s
Reflection of Feedback: I received wonderful amounts of feedback from my classmates. However, whenever I get the second chance to do something, I will always try my best to make it my better attempt at it. I feel like my classmates could have been little bit more harsh on my first elevator pitch, but I really appreciated each comment that I received!
What I Changed Based On My Feedback:
I decided to make the camera angle at eye level, adjust the lighting to a more contemporary mood, and to speak in a more enjoyable tone and not so loud for this elevator speech. Lastly, I tried to hook my audience with a better opening sentence instead of just getting right to the point. I would have liked to not have the pauses in the pitch and eliminate the use of words like "Umm", but I am still proud of the final product :)
Reflection of Feedback: I received wonderful amounts of feedback from my classmates. However, whenever I get the second chance to do something, I will always try my best to make it my better attempt at it. I feel like my classmates could have been little bit more harsh on my first elevator pitch, but I really appreciated each comment that I received!
What I Changed Based On My Feedback:
I decided to make the camera angle at eye level, adjust the lighting to a more contemporary mood, and to speak in a more enjoyable tone and not so loud for this elevator speech. Lastly, I tried to hook my audience with a better opening sentence instead of just getting right to the point. I would have liked to not have the pauses in the pitch and eliminate the use of words like "Umm", but I am still proud of the final product :)
ReplyDeleteHi Matthew,
You really improved on your second elevator pitch! You conveyed the logistics and appeal of your product very well. The only thing I would potentially change is the background. The picture on the wall was a tad bit distracting. Overall, you made great eye contact with the camera and remained professional throughout the entire elevator pitch. Great job!
Hey Matthew,
ReplyDeleteI like this pitch much more than your last. Your description of your idea is very clear and you used many consistent and relevant examples to support your idea. You're also professionally dressed and had a nice demeanor throughout your pitch .
Hey Matthew,
ReplyDeleteReally good elevator pitch. Was organized, serious, and well spoken. I think that you really were able to convey your message quickly, but not stumble it out. I definitely liked it more than your last one. I think that you really followed the feedback people gave you. Overall, really well done.